Want to know a big effing surprise? I loved this story. I know, I know, it's a shock.
You had one typo that I caught: you used breath instead of breathe, but that hardly mattered.
I loved the imagry and the language. I loved the doubt and I loved the idea that Slytherins were being tested and assaulted in the night to make them ripe for the future. I love that Bellatrix and her husband were the examples. The sleep walking was a creepy idea. And I still love the way you write Draco and Pansy. He balance her, made her feel whole, was what made her day sunnier and better. And when she felt lost she went to him and as long as he was lost too, she was content. It was a powerful piece and I'm glad it was niffled.
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Date: 2005-09-17 10:51 pm (UTC)You had one typo that I caught: you used breath instead of breathe, but that hardly mattered.
I loved the imagry and the language. I loved the doubt and I loved the idea that Slytherins were being tested and assaulted in the night to make them ripe for the future. I love that Bellatrix and her husband were the examples. The sleep walking was a creepy idea. And I still love the way you write Draco and Pansy. He balance her, made her feel whole, was what made her day sunnier and better. And when she felt lost she went to him and as long as he was lost too, she was content. It was a powerful piece and I'm glad it was niffled.